或者還應該增加什么？？？My name is dasha.I'm twenty year.I work at XXX,I'm form in beijing.I was born on august 5I enjoy a football,a basketball and computer,one of them enjoy computer the best.I want to be fashion designer.

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My name is dasha.I'm twenty years old. I work at XXX,I'm from beijing.I was born on August 5th.I enjoy playing football,basketball and computer,but I like computer best.(我想樓主的意思是說在足球、籃球、電腦這三項中，他最喜歡的是電腦，而不是說他朋友最喜歡什么）. I want to be a fashion designer.

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Poor English!My name is Dasha.I'm twenty years old.I work at XXX(in yyy company),I'm from beijing.I was born on August 5th.I enjoy playing football, basketball and computer. One of my friend enjoys computer the best.I want to be a fashion designer.